exploration of the author's death

[clandestine]

i posted some afi lyrics here, but thought i'd also show you some of my own work. i would love to hear any opinions.

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awake for days i slip slide into dream eyes
breath oscillates
and this is all that's left
a synergy spontaneously spinning
orbiting a possibility
that there's something immutable inside this thing
watching the words roll by
or do i create your present moment
in which case i can roam your mind
travel the path you walked perpetually
these words left my body
living isolated on this page like an abandoned child
hoping to be read; hesitant, afraid
eyes lit up like a bonfire
burning, it
springs out of this two-dimensional confinement
into the abstract obscurity
into the concepts that breathe and see the condensation billow out into negative space
as the shimmering track twists and diverges
you follow; moving right and down and left
to the next stepping stone
whisked frantically away by the chaotic uncontrollable
the something i feel so clearly
could be anything for you

it was designed by you
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[clandestine]

"the same, the same"

we started as a blank page, alone in the dark
screaming and pounding our fists against nothing
you held out your hand, a figure in the mist
soothing my shattered heart, you said:
"these words are alive,
they coarse through your veins"
and this was the start of
again and again, the same, the same

i drew another breath, and painted a picture
soft vibrations exude in this short interlude
'twixt darkness and truth, a cinder leapt from the fire
breaking the silence, you said:
"these words are alive,
they coarse through your veins"
and this was the start of
again and again, the same, the same

as time twists and turns us forwards
i'm sinking right back to this painstaking silence
to the centre of the circle
and all i want and all that i dream of
is you, is you; you said
"there's a song in your heart
and it's burning inside us, coarsing through our veins"
and this was the start of
again and again, the same, the same...
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[clandestine]

gah! someone reply! please!

[Xombie]

Is the second post you made your own work? I dont listen to AFI that much. I have only heard Miss Murder. I have been meaning to download their songs, but I keep forgetting.

[clandestine]

Both poems in this thread are my own work.

[Xombie]

Oh ok, I like them both. Your very good.